- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Vaticidalprophet talk 18:31, 24 October 2023 (UTC)
Randy Huntington
Created by Imcdc (talk). Self-nominated at 12:49, 27 September 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Randy Huntington; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
- Long enough, new enough when nominated, QPQ done, interesting hook fact with an an amazing feat for a coach. Unfortunately there are copyright/close paraphrasing issues. The source says
"In 2013, a burnt-out Huntington felt like he needed a break, so he went on a vacation—something he rarely did. Unsure as to where to go, Huntington randomly chose Beijing, since he had been there before. While in China, he met up with a friend who asked him to go to a track meet, and Huntington obliged. He was later asked to speak with some of the athletes at the track meet. Five months later, he received an email from the national Chinese track and field team asking him if he would be a part of the program."
In the article, this becomes
"In 2013, Huntington had felt burnt out and needed a break so he went on a vacation which he rarely did. He picked Beijing in China by random since he had been there before. While in China, he met up with a friend who asked him to attend a track meet which he obliged. At the event he spoke with several of the athletes there. Five months later, Huntington received an email from the Chinese Athletic Association asking if he wanted to be a coach in its track and field team."
This will need to be addressed before the article can become eligible. (Not sure whether other parts of the article are also affected).
—Kusma (talk) 15:54, 18 October 2023 (UTC)
- @Kusma: I have adjusted the wording for that part. See if this works. - Imcdc Contact 16:19, 18 October 2023 (UTC)
- @Imcdc: There is further close paraphrasing from [1]. —Kusma (talk) 10:00, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
- @Kusma: I have made further amendments. See if that covers it - Imcdc Contact 10:38, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
- @Imcdc: I think it is getting closer to acceptable now, but there are still things like "KSP was created to meet the specific training needs of the elite post-collegiate club and professional athlete. KSP supports athletes in the areas of track and field, hockey, football, baseball, auto racing and tennis." rendered as "It was created to meet the specific training needs of post-collegiate club and professional athletes. Apart from track and field, it supported athletes from other sports like hockey, football, baseball, auto racing and tennis." You should not copy and paste and then reword, but just write in your own words. If there is anything else that is essentially copypasted, please find all instances and fix them without me having to point them out. —Kusma (talk) 20:36, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
- @Kusma: I've tried rewording more stuff. Not just that section. Is there anything that is still flagged? - Imcdc Contact 16:47, 20 October 2023 (UTC)
- I think it's OK now, but try to avoid this next time.
—Kusma (talk) 21:42, 20 October 2023 (UTC)